Today’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Had a lot of fun with this prompt.
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Fifth Period
Jefferson High was an ordinary high school in Falkirk, Missouri. It held about 2500 students, had generally positive test scores, and an acceptable college admittance rate. Its students were ordinary students. They gossiped in the hall; they sent secret texts to one another under the desks, and dated as if they knew what forever really was.
Fifth Period Chemistry was an ordinary science class. There was a haphazard array of vials stacked in an distant corner of the class like kitchen spices of a person that pretends to cook between ordering take-out Chinese the other six nights a week. The walls of the class were lined with charts and diagrams. The solar system; the periodic table. Lots of laminated posters that nobody really looked at unless they were trying to find something to focus on without feeling guilty about ignoring class. Even the students were frozen in a tableau of glassy eyed stares that you’d find on the dead.
The only exception to this very ordinary class with ordinary students in an ordinary school was Dr. Patella.
She actually was dead.
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Nice description, I felt as though I was there.
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Thanks!
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True. You created such a scenic tale. I can see everyone through your words. 🙂
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Thanks. Hope you enjoyed it!
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Great twist. I liked the details leading to the final sentence.
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Thanks!
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Great how you’ve highlighted the ordinary and then threw a bombshell in – nicely done!
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Hahaha! Just an ordinary class full of bored students and a skeleton named Dr. Patella. Cute story Jon, I really enjoyed this.
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Thanks. I enjoyed writing it.
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When we enjoy writing a story, the story comes out so much better. At least, it does for me.
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I love your description of everything, everything makes you live in the scene… That makes the ending even better! Love it 🙂
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Everything was ordinary until … Dr Patella.
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Indeed.
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Stylish story and nice choice of names ‘Patella’ indeed!
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I really felt like I was there as one of those glassy eyed students. And I like the bit of humor with Dr. Patella who is dead but really the only one alive absurdly. Great writing.
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Believable description of a high school classroom. The end sounded like a twist to me because I interpreted it as the teacher was the one who was dead. That would make a good mystery.
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Thanks. I was going for a Skeleton teacher to reflect the prompt, but I see it your way too, and agree… That would make a great mystery opening. Thanks for reading!
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Great descriptions of the ‘ordinary high school’. Dr Patella sounds like an interesting teacher. 🙂
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No doubt. Thanks for reading!
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” There was a haphazard array of vials stacked in an distant corner of the class like kitchen spices of a person that pretends to cook between ordering take-out Chinese the other six nights a week.” I liked this sentence!
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Thanks. I was worried it would be awkward to read, but I liked the imagery too much to let it go. Thanks for reading!
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Very good description
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Thanks!
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My pleasure reading, description is something I have to work at, you know the old saying of “show not tell”
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