This week’s challenge for “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers.”
This week’s photo prompt is provided by pixabay.com.
What I Always Wanted
To say Marcus woke up would have been a lie. He hadn’t made it to sleep.
It was his sixteenth birthday and was, without question, going to be the best day of his life. That little apartment was fine and all but he was ready to get out and have freedom.
Freedom that a set of wheels was going to give him. His parents had asked what he wanted… As if they needed to. He was scheduled to get his license later today, and what would be a better gift than a new car? He had expected his pop’s old car… but then he overheard their conversation.
“-Silver on the wheels. Good brakes. I think he’ll love it, but was it worth buying new?”
Not the whole conversation, but it was enough. Once 7am hit, he charged downstairs. His parents were at the counter making breakfast. They seemed to understand exactly what was up. They exchanged a quick look.
Pops looked over and said, “It’s down in the alley, son. Go check it out!”
LOL! He thought he was getting a new car and he got a new bike. Hahaha! Great story!
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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the picture prompt!
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I love the idea that he thought he was going to get what he wanted! It certainly made me giggle 🙂
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed the story. It will certainly be a shocker…
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Not sure Marcus will be smiling when he gets to the alley.
Great story.
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Glad you enjoyed! I’d like to think his parents are giving him the old car as well, but are doing this as a gag. Surely no parent would be that spiteful (evil laugh).
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LOL!
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I’m still chuckling. I love how you ended it not with a clear reveal of the gift, but the suggestion based on the prompt. Cleverly written and an enjoyable and funny read.
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Aw man, poor guy, he will be so disappointed.. well done!
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Thanks!
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Poor Marcus. But I admit I’d like to see his face :D. Like The Voice, I really like that you didn’t spell it out – very clever!
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!
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Cleverly done! Poor kid is going to be so disappointed. The *other* kind of unrequited teenage longing — for the perfect car — almost as bad as the first one.
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Thanks for reading!
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Well done tale of unrequited longing.
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Thanks for reading it.
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Funny story! Poor Marcus. I’m not sure if his parents are unintentionally clueless or intentionally cruel.
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Thanks for reading it. I’m thinking intentionally cruel. No one is that out of touch. (;
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Aw, poor guy received a bike. Great lead up to.
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Well done Jon, enjoyed your tale and one wonders what son would have said when he came back from the alley…..
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Indeed. Thanks for reading!
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I’m astonished at how many readers thought this was funny. I thought it was terribly sad. Maybe I need to lighten up. Either way, great story. I enjoyed it! Thank you.
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Oh, no. Poor Marcus. He’s about to have a very rude awakening in the alley. I too, thought it was a bit sad as he will be very disappointed.
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He’ll be okay once he gets over the shock! Thanks for reading!
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Bet he is in for a big surprise.
DJ
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Definitely. Hopefully he gets over it! (;
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Great story Jon ~ I think you have all of us guessing with this one 🙂
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Lovely tale. We’re all about like that aren’t we. Always managing our expectations. Well told.
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it!
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